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harold was a baby

,

and then he was a toddler

,

and then he was a little kid

,

and then he was a bigger little kid

,

and he liked sports

,

and he played them
for like a lifetime

,

and then he was a teenager

,

and he didn't play sports anymore

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and then he had a girlfriend

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and they went out
for like a lifetime

,

and then they broke up

,

and then he had other girlfriends

,

and then he liked music

,

and then he graduated from highschool

,

and then he saw the serenity prayer

,

and then he became more spiritual

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and then he became a vegetarian

,

and then he went to college

,

and he did drugs in college
for like a lifetime

,

and then he graduated from college

,

and he then he stopped doing drugs

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and he stopped being a vegetarian

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and then he met a girl

,

and they went on a date and it lasted
for like a lifetime

,

and then he married her

,

and then he got a job

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and then he divorced her

,

and then he married someone else

,

and then he divorced her

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and then he was walking to a train station

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and he was walking down the steps

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and he didn't notice anybody around

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and then he was cornered by two men wearing old sports jerseys and do-rags

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and then one of the men punched him in the face

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and then the other man punched him in the stomach

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and then the first man kicked him in the side

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and then harold was told to give up his wallet

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and then harold cried for help

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and then the second man punched him in the face

,

and then the first man pulled out a gun

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and harold gazed into the barrel of the gun
for like a lifetime

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and that was harold
:iconpereubuisjesus:

Author's Comments

This is older. I wrote it a while back but didnt post it. I would be interested to hear your thoughts on it. Despite "Harry" being short for "Harold" it is not autobiographical.

And I can't decide whether the title should be "Biography" or "Lifetimes" so I'd like your opinion on that as well.

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:iconmothfather:
and then he married her

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and then he got a job

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and then he divorced her


crushed me. i was hoping for a happy ending

i think you should just call it the biography of harold

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:iconphillgh:
i'd go with lifetimes...i dunno, i think it could appeal to a wider audience with that name

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hello...

i'm a writer

i suck
:iconphilthey:
I like this, it trips along in my head at a really good pace and the very simplicity makes it all the more... real in some ways.

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And endless screams of silent schemes" - Used with kind permission of ~fly-high-butterfly14
:iconpereubuisjesus:
Ha, sorry I crushed you. I will write lots of poems to keep you company in hospital and maybe, someday you will walk again and be able to eat regularly and not through a tube. xD

Thank you for the suggestion and the comment :D

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See you space cowboy...
:iconhigh-on-sharpie:
wow, i loved this...
you should keep it as biography.

one thing that sort of annoyed me, though, was that you used the word 'like'... it just doesn't feel right, maybe 'what felt like' 'almost' or something similar would work better?
:iconemomcrluvr:
I really like this... i think you shuld keep the title as biography...
when people have biographies, for me, it seems like it's more for sympathy or bashing someone than for that person... this really shows the reality of harolds life...

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:iconpereubuisjesus:
hmm okay thank you :D

ah the part you speak about...I was trying to convey a very bored tone when I was writing this, so that was the reason for it. I didn't want to show any emotion because I see harold as just a boring drone. idk, if you like try reading it again to yourself in a monotone and maybe you'll see what Im getting at.

Do you think the negative "bored teenager" implications of the word "like" gets in the way?

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See you space cowboy...
:iconpereubuisjesus:
Lifetimes seemed to be more to the point of the piece. Lots of people are going for biography though. I might just switch it and switch it back to get real reactions.

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See you space cowboy...
:iconpereubuisjesus:
Yeah, I tried not to use flowery language.

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See you space cowboy...
:iconpereubuisjesus:
Thank you :) I never thought of it like that.
Others have commented on the "real" quality of this.
Harold is actually a character I hate though.

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See you space cowboy...

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