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Will I ever be able
to tiptoe with bubble-bath
excitement through
the cotton candy forests
of your heart,

without turning into
a dystopian protagonist
and setting fire
to it?
Being quietly happy with what I have is not something I am good at.
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Given 2011-04-27
The title of O Woe, Cotton Candy On Fire caught my eye and told me in no uncertain terms that I have to share this poem. And the rest of ~pereubuisjesus's fantastic gallery is full of sometimes-thoughtful, sometimes-intense, and always-witty pieces. ( Featured by nycterent )
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SacrificerPS3 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
almost as original as Harlem. Almost. Props to you.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Professional Artist
Thank you for your delicious props :)
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SacrificerPS3 Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011
You should get this published, I'm serious.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 4, 2011  Professional Artist
I would love to do that one day. Once I muster the drive ;)
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SacrificerPS3 Featured By Owner May 4, 2011
Why wait? You could be the next Langston Hughes.
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akaRoger Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Student Photographer
I love this. It's wonderfully witty and really embodies something that many of us need to work on. (especially me right now)
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Professional Artist
I'm happy you found it relevant to your life. Thank you for the comment and the favorite. I wish you luck in your self-work :)
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youshakemyblood Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Student General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :D It's about time! As always, Love your work!
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Professional Artist
Thanks! :) and thanks for...is it the third re-watch?
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youshakemyblood Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Student General Artist
Ahaha. Yeah, idk. my dA keeps removing people from my watch, and when I add them back on it won't save. Sorry about that :p It's happening to some of my friends on here too.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 1, 2011  Professional Artist
Eh, it's cool. :)
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TwistedAlyx Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
HAHAHAHAHA YES! :clap: Congrats on the DD.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Professional Artist
Thanks :)
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MarsAttack464 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
I'm not even sure what most of this means, but I absolutely adore it
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
Thank you! Glad you do! It's about not being able to accept love.
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KaitousBlackWings Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
For some reason the line of "dystopian protagonist" brings to mind bitter memories of 12th Grade English class--but that might just be me. :'D
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Professional Artist
:)
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littlebookie Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this makes my imaginations go wild lol
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
That is the best compliment I can recieve. May your imaginations bleet and honk and jive like colorful coral in a reef!
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littlebookie Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
.. lol!
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dead-now Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hmmm... the images and turning point are fantastic, yes. However, I'm not quite so sure that the whole motif of asking a question with the whole poem really works. That could just be me, I don't know. I suppose I would just like to prefer it as a statement rather than asking some sort of permission from an unknown entity. But the idea itself is fantastic, well done.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
Thank you! What will happen if my poem works? Will I be able to drive it off of its page? Off of the internet? Will it cook my tortellini? If I swallow it in a pill will it make me happy after I have made the poem functional? Will it...d'ya think...(hehe snort)...will it get me a girlfriend? Just joshing.

Well, my editing hand isn't getting a boner from looking at the poem as a question, so I doubt that aspect of the poem will change (though he is very much aroused by an antecedent disagreement in the bottom half;)).

I appreciate the thoughtful comment :D I'll send you one or two too mayhaps
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dead-now Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
My giddy aunt... are you feeling well?
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
chipper as fritolay. and this is the way i chirp
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dead-now Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Good to know.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Professional Artist
I didn't mean to annoy you, if I did.
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dead-now Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, no. Don't worry. I was just trying to make sense of things is all.
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Gaia1390 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
Oh this is lovely- fantastic imagery.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
:D thanks
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lyingdyingwonderbody Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
feels like I'm the dystopian protagonist
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
That's pretty much the worst way a human being can feel. That title brings with it a mean sky. I send you buckets of love. They'll be outside your window in an orange crane's beak in at least four days time. If you live on a continent that is not north america, you can expect my buckets of love in abitunder a week, but orange cranes recieve deliveries and start processing them immediately. "Red Tape" is not in an Orange Crane's vocabulary.
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lyingdyingwonderbody Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I really have to thank you for this nice comment, it really cheered me up!
I just had this really devestating feeling in me and somehow saw me in this poem, but hey, right now I'm feeling ok.
you have great a power in langauge.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Professional Artist
I'm glad it did :)

and thank you for the compliment.
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lyingdyingwonderbody Featured By Owner May 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :)

I wish I could be as prolific as you are.
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90chibichan232 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
being quietly happy is my problem too.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
:hug: Don't be quiet!
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90chibichan232 Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
thanks! you too
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gforcetwo Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Well played, Sir.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
:)
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BurningRoseBud Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
what a pretty allegory!
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
Thanks! Glad you think so!
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BurningRoseBud Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
you're welcome:)
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The-Ghost-Dancers Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe, It made me laugh, because I think like that exactly :D
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
The more you laugh, the more years it takes for you to die. Thank you mucho!
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 6, 2011  Professional Artist
Twitter? Meee---yoooowww...(paws face disgruntledly and wiggles nose)
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner May 7, 2011
You are one strange cat. :giggle:
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner May 7, 2011  Professional Artist
All cats are strange. My favorite are the alleycats who sing in the courtyard of my apartment complex.
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baarish Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2009
WOW! that just blew me out of the universe.
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pereubuisjesus Featured By Owner Dec 3, 2009  Professional Artist
Wow! thats a long way. Glad you like it :D
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