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Pioneer by ~pereubuisjesus:iconpereubuisjesus:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Narrative > Open


I died



and then
everything
got cinematic.

everything
was airy
         and
              silver-kissed

like a sunny
day
      at the
      airport.
               I saw winking
                          lights

   through
                 a haze
    of raw color
waiting with
              wriggling
excitement to be
     molded
into tools
         and windows
                      and automobiles

and I felt like a pioneer
standing on a
mother-giant's thumb.
©2009-2010 ~pereubuisjesus
:iconpereubuisjesus:

Author's Comments

This is an entry for a contest with the theme, "beginning".

Comments


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:iconfred-s-kaed:
*Fred-S-Kaed Apr 30, 2009, 3:36:35 PM
Begining? Kinda ironic, I like it.

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That will be all. For now. --_--
:iconnny13:
~nny13 Apr 30, 2009, 4:20:45 PM
The style seems a little different

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around around the sun we go
the moon goes round the earth
we do not die of death
we die of vertigo
:iconpereubuisjesus:
~pereubuisjesus Apr 30, 2009, 4:28:31 PM
yeah, I think its actually good because it will catch the attention of the contest people.

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See you space cowboy...
:iconpereubuisjesus:
~pereubuisjesus Apr 30, 2009, 4:29:04 PM
hmm I suppose, I mean I think I have done stuff like this before, just not very much.

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See you space cowboy...
:iconnny13:
~nny13 Apr 30, 2009, 5:04:50 PM
Yea ur probably right @_@
Well it's still good so lalalalalalalalalalalala

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around around the sun we go
the moon goes round the earth
we do not die of death
we die of vertigo
:iconpereubuisjesus:
~pereubuisjesus Apr 30, 2009, 6:32:55 PM
thankee :D

--
See you space cowboy...
:iconphillgh:
~phillGH May 1, 2009, 3:41:38 AM
awesome!

i miss the beginning...humans suck =/

--
hello...

i'm a writer

i suck
:iconpereubuisjesus:
~pereubuisjesus May 1, 2009, 2:51:27 PM
they really do. I wish humans didnt feel the need to be better and go into outer space and kill other humans.

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See you space cowboy...
:iconphillgh:
~phillGH May 1, 2009, 2:59:02 PM
thats 'cause humans don't value lives

--
hello...

i'm a writer

i suck
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